Reviews For Chains of Love
Reviewer: Meesh Signed
Date: 06/03/09 - 06:14PM
Title: In the Beginning
Hey, this plot is really nice! I especially like the opening. It is very heartbreaking! I look forward to seeing what happens next!
I do have a suggestion, however. I feel like everything happens wayy too fast. I kind of feel like I'm reading a summary instead of a narrative. For example, I feel Yuki grows attached to Caleb way too fast. They hardly even talked before the Jafar confrontation.
Does that make sense?
Very interesting and creative plot. I like your new characters too! Just slow down. :)
Author's Response: I know its a little fast but I'm working on it a little by little thanks for the suggestion