Its a ok story.i mean if its your first time.but Meg is right u made mozy alittle to nice.hope u update soon.
Hey hey! Glad to find a new author. I'd just like to give ya a lil' review. It's Mozenrath... not Mosenwrath. And you might wanna work on Mozernath's character a little bit... he shouldn't be so... nice. He's too nice, and not his usual smartass self...
Oh! And Genie calls Carpet, "rug-man"... it helps if you use character nicknames... helps keep us thinking it's an actual Aladdin story.
Other than that, it's good. I like your word usage. Very awesome.
Author's Response: Yeah, I know most of what you said, however this was just a work for an English class. My teacher didn't approve some of the things so I had to change it. Heh, heh. Surprisingly, she got confused when Genie called Carpet, "Rug-man." She isn't familiar with the Aladdin characters. Thanks anyways. It gets better in the next chapters :P On the Mosenrath spelling thingy, I mispelled it once and the teacher goes, "omg, like that names so cool." o_o;;;